Posted 3:28 AM by Steve
Matt: Cheers, I think, although I'm not sure I see in my writing what you do. The penchant for paper line leaps out at me as way too much. Still, thanks for the words. Like I say, I wasn't sure whether to include it, and the deafening consensus seems to be that I was right.

As for chat, well, I could possibly stretch the budget to an hour at most, but I think the time difference is just unworkable, so I'll have to go by the transcript and throw in thoughts. As there seems to be some sort of confusion over whether there is a need to go to the museum, maybe the first thing that needs sorting out is where the story is pulling. Personally, I think the museum has been mentioned so much there's definitely a weight pulling the story there. Character arcs that seem to need resolution to me are, well, I figure Boris has to die, in some way saving something.

I have a leaning towards a Romeo and Juliet with Tom and Claire, but nothing in the text pulls that way. I did try to write some pieces that pulled together Boris and Tom, with Tom realising what path he was on and deciding to get off, but since I didn't get it to hang right, I know not why I mention it here. I think Pauline is taken care of. I guess the only problem I have with them not going to the museum is what else do they do? I had a few pages of dialogue between Claire and Kirsten where Kirsten was the social conscience who felt they had to go to the museum, but that didn't sit right with Kirsten's character as far as I see it.

I guess I just see the text as pulling to the museum, there seems to me to be some sort of resolution to the Basque Factor situation needed, and that all points to the museum. Unless we just let the Basque explode the museum, although then where does that lead? Matt, what did you have in mind regarding Pauline's plans, the line about the dominoes especially leads to somewhere.

What's Tasting the air?